Do you think that it\'s time for Korea to change some of its educational systems? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes... I think they don\'t HAVE TO, but we would like it.
Because some works from school are too hard for our age.
And we and also our parents should worry about what middle, high school, and college to go even when we are so young.
And we have to play sometimes. But we don\'t have time usually.
It\'s good for our health too.
So I think it would be better :-))
-The End-
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Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you.
Keep up the good work!
Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)
Do you think that it\\\'s time for Korea to change some of its educational systems?
Why or why not?
Yes... I think they don\'t HAVE TO, but we would like it.
>>> CORRECT
OR: Yes, I think they don\'t have to but we would like it to happen.
Because some works from school are too hard for our age.
>>> CORRECT
OR: I think some school works are actually too hard for our age.
And we and also our parents should worry about what middle, high school, and college to go even when we are so young.
>>> Students together with their parents are already worried about where to go for middle school, high school, and university even if they are still young.
And we have to play sometimes. But we don\'t have time usually.
>>> We wanted to play sometimes but we don\'t have time because of homework and academy activities.
It\'s good for our health too. So I think it would be better.
>>> It would be good for our health if we can play sometime and I think it would be better to lessen the stress of studying in Korea.
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