Do you think that luxury goods make people happy? Why or why not?

2015-08-10 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Luxury goods can make some people happy, but not all of the people will be happy about purchasing or having them. Most people buy and carry luxury goods to show them to other people. They feel they are luxury goods themselves when they carry or wear them. They think they are treated as luxury goods when they have them. There will be very few people who feel happy just about collecting them without showing off. You can name all the luxury goods such as luxury cloths, bags, cars, or jewelries. All of them are to show to others. They want others to recognize and judge themselves by the things they own. They believe they won’t be looked down when they wear or carry luxury goods. As a society is getting advanced, people become more materialistic than ever.We are getting selfish and seek happiness through buying and owning things. We are getting greedier and wanting more and more.We would rather pursue happiness through having things more than feel happy by being satisfied with what we have

강사 첨삭

Happy Monday Sir [이름]!

Thanks for your time and for sharing your insights about having luxury goods.

Yes, I totally agree with your ideas that you wrote below.

Some people are judge others just because of having those things.

We should be thankful for what we have and think about the future.

We can talk more about this in class.
Teacher Nina


Luxury goods can make some people happy, but not all of the people will be happy about purchasing or having them.

>> correct

>> OR: Luxury goods can make some people happy, but not all of them will be happy in purchasing or having them.

Most people buy and carry luxury goods to show them to other people.

>> correct

They feel they are luxury goods themselves when they carry or wear them.

>> They feel that they have a luxurious life whenever they carry it or wear them.

They think they are treated as luxury goods when they have them.

>> correct

>> OR: They think they are treated in a special way when they have them.

There will be very few people who feel happy just about collecting them without showing off.

>> correct

>> OR: Very few people feel happy in collecting them without show it off.

You can name all the luxury goods such as luxury cloths, bags, cars, or jewelries.

>> correct

All of them are to show to others.

>> correct

They want others to recognize and judge themselves by the things they own.

>> correct

They believe they won’t be looked down when they wear or carry luxury goods.

>> correct

>> OR: They believe that they won\'t be looked down when they wear or carry luxury goods.

As a society is getting advanced, people become more materialistic than ever.

>> correct

We are getting selfish and seek happiness through buying and owning things.

>> correct

We are getting greedier and wanting more and more.

>> correct

We would rather pursue happiness through having things more than feel happy by being satisfied with what we have

>> correct

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