Do you think that money can buy happiness?
학생이 쓴 원문
Money is important for life. I can do almost everything if I have money. However, I can\'t buy happiness with only money because every rich people are not happy although they have great money.
Then, don’t I need money to be happy? The answer is No. I can be more convenient and rich with much money.
But it is sure that we can get happy with little money. We can see many poor family loving each other about us.
So how can we be happy?
Above all, I think we need beloved ones to be with to be happy because happiness comes from not what I have but who I am with.
I\'m not telling you that I don\'t need money. I also need money to live. The thing is that relationship is more important than money for us to be happy. Therefore, I hope I have enough money, good family and good friends to be happy.
*Thank you for teaching me, teacher! These days I feel that my English level is getting up and up thanks to you. I look forward to your kind and continuous support.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Rana!
Very good answer! You are right! It\'s not all about money. Yes, money is essential to us, since it is what we use to purchase the things that we need. But I think happiness comes from the little things that we do every day, especially with the people we love. Also, being satisfied with what we have can also make us feel happy.
*You\'re welcome! Thank you as well for showing a very nice attitude in the class and I can really see that you are doing your best to learn in the class. Keep up the good work!
I\'m also looking forward to have a more fun and interesting class with you. See you later ^^
~T. Roanne ^_^
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Money is important for life.
>> Correct!
I can do almost everything if I have money.
>> Correct!
However, I can\'t buy happiness with only money because every rich people are not happy although they have great money.
>> However, I can\'t buy happiness with only money, because every rich people are not happy although they have great money.
Then, don’t I need money to be happy? The answer is No.
Then, don’t I need money to be happy? The answer is No.
>> Correct!
I can be more convenient and rich with much money.
>> I can be more convenient and be rich with much money.
But it is sure that we can get happy with little money.
But it is sure that we can get happy with little money.
>> But it is sure that we can get happy with less money.
We can see many poor family loving each other about us.
>> We can see many poor family loving each other.
So how can we be happy?
So how can we be happy?
>> Correct!
Above all, I think we need beloved ones to be with to be happy because happiness comes from not what I have but who I am with.
Above all, I think we need beloved ones to be with to be happy because happiness comes from not what I have but who I am with.
>> Above all, I think we need to be with our beloved ones to be happy because happiness comes from not what I have but who I am with.
I\'m not telling you that I don\'t need money.
I\'m not telling you that I don\'t need money.
>> Correct!
I also need money to live.
>> Correct!
The thing is that relationship is more important than money for us to be happy.
>> The thing is that the relationship is more important than money for us to be happy.
Therefore, I hope I have enough money, good family and good friends to be happy.
>> Correct!
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