Do you think that news is censored in some countries? Is the news censored in your country?

2019-12-17 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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Press is very important element for democracy. Through the press, we can get many information. Also, we can check the power and prevent the corruption. Thus, freedom of speech and publication is protected by constitution. Every year, Reporters Without Borders(RSF) have released the press freedom index of 180 countries from 2002. It have changed in Korea. Our ranking started the 39th in 2002, but it is decreased the 70th in 2016. However, Korea ranked the 41th this year. This result is most high ranking in Asia. So, I think my country is less censored the new than other countries. From other different point of view, I think it need to censor the news. In other words, fake news without evidence are censored to deliver the exact information. But, it can be misused because people doesn’t perfect. Thus, journalist should have the belief and pursue the truth. Also, they should be fair about all news. For democracy, the press should always pursue the justice.

강사 첨삭

Thank you Se [이름]!


~Teacher Lucy


Press is very important element for democracy.

>>CORRECT!

>>Press is an essential element for democracy.


Through the press, we can get many information.

>>CORRECT!

>>We can get information from the press.


 Also, we can check the power and prevent the corruption.

>>CORRECT!

>>Moreover, we can check who are in power and the corrupt.


 Thus, freedom of speech and publication is protected by constitution.

>>CORRECT!

>>Therefore, freedom of speech is protected by the constitution.


 Every year, Reporters Without Borders(RSF) have released the press freedom index of 180 countries from 2002.

>>CORRECT!


 It have changed in Korea.

>>CORRECT!


 Our ranking started the 39th in 2002, but it is decreased the 70th in 2016.

>>Our ranking started 39th in 2002, but it is decreased 70th in 2016.


However, Korea ranked the 41th this year.

>>However, Korea ranked 41th this year.


This result is most high ranking in Asia.

>>CORRECT!


 So, I think my country is less censored the new than other countries.

>> So, I think my country is less censored than other countries.

 From other different point of view, I think it need to censor the news.

>> From other different point of view, I think it needs to be censored.


 In other words, fake news without evidence are censored to deliver the exact information.

>>CORRECT!


But, it can be misused because people doesn’t perfect.

>>But, it can be misused because people are not perfect.


Thus, journalist should have the belief and pursue the truth.

>>CORRECT!

>>Thus, journalists should have the integrity and pursue the truth.


Also, they should be fair about all news.

>>CORRECT!

>>Moreover, they should always be in accordance with the rules and standards.


 For democracy, the press should always pursue the justice.

>>CORRECT!

>>For democracy, the press should always pursue justice.

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