Do you think that news is censored in some countries? Is the news censored in your country?
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Press is very important element for democracy.
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>>Press is an essential element for democracy.
Through the press, we can get many information.
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>>We can get information from the press.
Also, we can check the power and prevent the corruption.
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>>Moreover, we can check who are in power and the corrupt.
Thus, freedom of speech and publication is protected by constitution.
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>>Therefore, freedom of speech is protected by the constitution.
Every year, Reporters Without Borders(RSF) have released the press freedom index of 180 countries from 2002.
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It have changed in Korea.
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Our ranking started the 39th in 2002, but it is decreased the 70th in 2016.
>>Our ranking started 39th in 2002, but it is decreased 70th in 2016.
However, Korea ranked the 41th this year.
>>However, Korea ranked 41th this year.
This result is most high ranking in Asia.
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So, I think my country is less censored the new than other countries.
>> So, I think my country is less censored than other countries.
From other different point of view, I think it need to censor the news.
>> From other different point of view, I think it needs to be censored.
In other words, fake news without evidence are censored to deliver the exact information.
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But, it can be misused because people doesn’t perfect.
>>But, it can be misused because people are not perfect.
Thus, journalist should have the belief and pursue the truth.
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>>Thus, journalists should have the integrity and pursue the truth.
Also, they should be fair about all news.
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>>Moreover, they should always be in accordance with the rules and standards.
For democracy, the press should always pursue the justice.
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>>For democracy, the press should always pursue justice.
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