Do you think that older people make better leaders?

2021-03-11 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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To become a good leader, there are a number of qualification; such as interpersonal skills, deep knowledge and insight, generous and modesty mind, and so on. In general, I believe people could not get those requirements automatically when they are getting older. However, I accord with the idea that politician, as a good leader, needs numerous experience for a better decision. In addition, personally, it seems like their decision would be right and more reliable. If they have a sufficient experience, it could effect in a positive way to become good leaders, but I may not be saying that the older they are, the better leaders could become.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! 

Thank you so much for sending a composition. ^^ 
You did well in articulating what you wanted to say. 
Keep up the good work!~


~t. Ally


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To become a good leader, there are a number of qualification; such as interpersonal skills, deep knowledge and insight, generous and modesty mind, and so on. 
>> To become a good leader, there are a number of qualifications, such as: interpersonal skills, deep knowledge and insight, generosity, a modest mind and many more.

In general, I believe people could not get those requirements automatically when they are getting older. 
>> CORRECT!

However, I accord with the idea that politician, as a good leader, needs numerous experience for a better decision.
>> However, I accord with the idea that politicians need numerous experiences to make better decisions as leaders.

In addition, personally, it seems like their decision would be right and more reliable. 
>> CORRECT!

If they have a sufficient experience, it could effect in a positive way to become good leaders, but I may not be saying that the older they are, the better leaders could become.
>> If they have sufficient experiences, it would have a positive effect in becoming good leaders, but I am not definitively saying that the older they are, the better leaders they could become.

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