Do you think that one day, will there be a medicine that can cure all illnesses?

2014-03-11 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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It has been a dream since the begining for a human being to invent or make a medicine that can cure all illnesses. It is like someting that can prevent aging or recover muscles so that people can become even younger. Such a magic world will never come. Imagine if there is a cure and it is made public for everyone to use? To never get sick, to never see a loved one die from cancer or AIDS, or to see all children grow and develop to their full potentials without their lives being thwarted or cut short from diseases. If there is a cure for all diseases could it be made available to everyone? How would we approach it? Can we make it work in our society? The answer is no, it would not, we could not and no it can not. If a cure for all diseases was to be made public now there would be huge ramifications. Such as a population explosion that would result from people living longer and only dying from natural causes. Hundreds of thousands would be without jobs.

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Good evening to you Sir [이름]! What a marvelous essay! You impressed me with your ideas tonight! I do agree with you. It will never happen and it will cause more problems. It is because if that medicine will be sold out in the market, the demand will rise. There might be some problems that people would kill each other in order to have that kind of drug. Thank you for sharing your thoughts about this.^^ I really appreciate it a lot. I hope that you were able to read my message for you on your page. ^^ See you tomorrow! Good night!Teacher Nina   It has been a dream since the begining for a human being to invent or make a medicine that can cure all illnesses. >> Correct! >> OR: It has a been a dream for people to invent or make a medicine that can cure all illnesses. It is like someting that can prevent aging or recover muscles so that people can become even younger. >> It is like something that can prevent aging or regenerate muscles so that people will look younger. Such a magic world will never come. >> Correct! >> OR: It\'s such a magic world that will never happen. Imagine if there is a cure and it is made public for everyone to use? >> Imagine if there is a cure and it is made for the public to use? To never get sick, to never see a loved one die from cancer or AIDS, or to see all children grow and develop to their full potentials without their lives being thwarted or cut short from diseases. >> Did you mean: It is used for us to avoid getting sick, to never see a loved one die from Cancer or AIDS, or to see all the children grow and develop their full potentials without their lives being thwarted or cut short because of diseases. If there is a cure for all diseases could it be made available to everyone? >> Correct! How would we approach it? >> Correct! Can we make it work in our society? >> Correct! The answer is no, it would not, we could not and no it can not. >> Correct! If a cure for all diseases was to be made public now there would be huge ramifications. >> If a cure for all diseases will be made to the public there would be huge ramifications. Such as a population explosion that would result from people living longer and only dying from natural causes. >> Correct! Hundreds of thousands would be without jobs >> Hundreds of thousands of people will lost their jobs. >> OR: Hundreds of thousands of people will not have jobs.

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