Do you think that people have the right to own a gun? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
No. It\'s because if we have the right to own a gun, it will happen really bad accident. For example, now Americans has a gun because of the free right. But many criminal incidents are happening. So I\'m very worry about the criminal incident by a gun, I don\'t think it doesn\'t need it.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Daisy.
Thank you for answering this essay question.
I agree that civilians should not be allowed to own guns.
I think the only people who should own guns are police officers and soldiers.
It\'s because the use of guns can be substantially abused.
Thank you for answering this essay question.
I agree that civilians should not be allowed to own guns.
I think the only people who should own guns are police officers and soldiers.
It\'s because the use of guns can be substantially abused.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great. See you again in class tomorrow. ^^
~Teacher Charry
~Teacher Charry
>> No, people should not be given the right to own a gun.
It\'s because if we have the right to own a gun, it will happen really bad accident.
>> It\'s because if we have the right to own a gun, really bad accidents will happen.
For example, now Americans has a gun because of the free right.
>> For example, Americans right now are able to own guns because it\'s part of their right.
But many criminal incidents are happening.
>> CORRECT!
So I\'m very worry about the criminal incident by a gun, I don\'t think it doesn\'t need it.
>> So I\'m very worry about the criminal incidences caused by guns. I don\'t think we need it.
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