Do you think that pets have a positive or negative influence on people’s health? Why?

2016-09-08 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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My daughter has been constantly pleading for a pet, a dog. However, I just could not take the responsibility of a pet. She will be delighted to have a pet. When a child lives with a pet, the child has a friend to share its thoughts and feelings with. Child development experts vouch for the benefits of having a pet. Pets for children are a wonderful thing and teach children responsibilities and love. Caring for another living creature helps children make friends and be responsible beings. Children learn about trust. A child can transform into a responsible young one. Having a pet makes a child positive and increases self-esteem and confidence, enhance compassion and empathy. Pets for children ensure that a child leads a more active and healthy life. However, I am worried about the situation that caring a pet will completely become my responsibility when my daughter doesn’t do her job well. Another negative thing is bad smell in the house. A dog might lose hair and people can inhale it.

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Happy fourth day of the week, Sir [이름]! ^.^ Thank you so much for sending this in. I think your daughter wants to take good care of a dog and treat it like a member of the family. I do understand your worries. I guess there should be rules in order for her to have a pet. We can talk more about this in class. Talk to you tonight. ^^ Teacher Nina   My daughter has been constantly pleading for a pet, a dog. >> correct However, I just could not take the responsibility of a pet. >> Better: However, I just could not take the responsibility of having a pet. She will be delighted to have a pet. >> correct When a child lives with a pet, the child has a friend to share its thoughts and feelings with. >> correct Child development experts vouch for the benefits of having a pet. >> correct Pets for children are a wonderful thing and teach children responsibilities and love. >> correct Caring for another living creature helps children make friends and be responsible beings. >> correct Children learn about trust. >> correct A child can transform into a responsible young one. >> correct Having a pet makes a child positive and increases self-esteem and confidence, enhance compassion and empathy. >> correct Pets for children ensure that a child leads a more active and healthy life. >> correct However, I am worried about the situation that caring a pet will completely become my responsibility when my daughter doesn’t do her job well. >> correct Another negative thing is bad smell in the house. >> Better: Another negative thing is the bad smell in the house. A dog might lose hair and people can inhale it. >> correct

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