Do you think that punishment for violent crimes should be the same for juveniles and adults? Why/why

2014-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I do not think that punishment for violent crimes should be the same for juveniles and adults. It is true that teens or young kids are not mature enough to make a right decision. They often are not aware of how serious it is to commit a crime and how it will affect the rest of their life. They are not conscious of the consequences of their indiscreet behavior. Although they are vulnerable to temptations, they can be rehabilitated much easier than adults through appropriate programs and intensive care because their personality, attitude and view have not been formed firmly yet. They have a lot of potential to be reborn so that an opportunity should be given to them rather than focusing on punishment. The earlier is the best when it comes to disciplining juveniles. This is why almost all countries enforce different regulations including punishment for juvenile crimes. It's probably adults' fault to let them grow to be real monsters who commit heinous crimes.

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Hello Sir [이름]^^ I totally agree with you. You shared a lot of things in your essay. I think the adults are the ones responsible for the child\'s behavior. Some kids think that when they are punished, they are not loved. There are instances that they become rebellious because it is not explained to them. I think programs or counselling can help the guardians to let the child understand the situation. On the other hand, adults are already mature and they know what is wrong and right. I appreciate your efforts and ideas today. Thanks for your time. Teacher Nina   I do not think that punishment for violent crimes should be the same for juveniles and adults. >> Correct! It is true that teens or young kids are not mature enough to make a right decision. >> Correct! >> OR: It is true teens or young kids are not mature enough to make a good decision. They often are not aware of how serious it is to commit a crime and how it will affect the rest of their life. >> They are not often aware of how serious it is to commit a crime and how it will affect the rest of their life. They are not conscious of the consequences of their indiscreet behavior. >> Correct! Although they are vulnerable to temptations, they can be rehabilitated much easier than adults through appropriate programs and intensive care because their personality, attitude and view have not been formed firmly yet. >> Correct! They have a lot of potential to be reborn so that an opportunity should be given to them rather than focusing on punishment. >> Correct! The earlier is the best when it comes to disciplining juveniles. >> Correct! This is why almost all countries enforce different regulations including punishment for juvenile crimes. >> Correct! It\'s probably adults\' fault to let them grow to be real monsters who commit heinous crimes. >> Correct!

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