Do you think that religion is important?
학생이 쓴 원문
I always say it\'s not important to believe in a religion. I guess it\'s a freedom whether believe in or not, but no one can force you to believe in religion. Why I think like this, there are many religious activities to believe in God or come to church in South Korea. So I still don\'t like it.
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I always say it\'s not important to believe in a religion.
>> I always say that it\'s not important to believe in religion.
I guess it\'s a freedom whether believe in or not, but no one can force you to believe in religion.
>> I guess it\'s a form of freedom so no one should force you to believe in a religion.
Why I think like this, there are many religious activities to believe in God or come to church in South Korea.
>> The reason why I think like is because there are many religious activities in South Korea so I don\'t like it.
So I still don\'t like it.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.
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