Do you think that religion is important? Why or why not?
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In my opinion, religion is important.
Whether there is a god or not, if we have a religion, then we can get a lot of benefits by believing a god.
If we have a religion, then we can grow our abilities to trust each other.
And also we can be relaxed by praying to the god or even thinking about our religions.
Because of these benefits, I think religions are important.
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Hi [이름]! :)
In my opinion, religion is important.
>> CORRECT
Whether there is a god or not, if we have a religion, then we can get a lot of benefits by believing a god.
>> Whether there is a God or not, if we have a religion, we can get a lot of benefits if we believe in a God.
If we have a religion, then we can grow our abilities to trust each other.
>> CORRECT
And also we can be relaxed by praying to the god or even thinking about our religions.
>> And we can feel relaxed by praying to a God or even thinking about the religion itself.
Because of these benefits, I think religions are important.
>> CORRECT
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