Do you think that using social media to prevent dementia can have repercussions in the long run?
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I believe, using social media to prevent dementia can have repercussions in the long run. There is a phrase, a penny saved is a penny earned. Well, preventing dementia by using social media will not quickly show positive consequences. However, as the phrase said, even if it\'s just a small thing, it will bring a huge result in the end. Social media becomes the best method for anything, even if it seems impossible. In other words, social media has used for even treat people. Also, for diseases that relate to brain function, I believe social media is the best option since it provides applications that can help to practice speaking, reading, listening, and writing, which is the essential and basic way to prevent the diseases, such as dementia, Alzheimer, etc.
(Well, Ms. [Name]. I don\'t have any idea about this topic... I tried my best...!)
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What I like about this essay is that even if you did not tell me a lot, it remained informative and relevant to the topic at hand. You made sure to elaborate as well in order to persuade your reader. Great job! See you in class tonight.
~T.Harmony <3
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There is a phrase, a penny saved is a penny earned.
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Well, preventing dementia by using social media will not quickly show positive consequences.
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OR>> ...will not immediately show positive results.
However, as the phrase said, even if it\'s just a small thing, it will bring a huge result in the end.
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Social media becomes the best method for anything, even if it seems impossible.
Social media becomes the best method for anything, even if it seems impossible.
>> Social media has become the best method...
In other words, social media has used for even treat people.
>> ...has been used for treatment of people.
Also, for diseases that relate to brain function, I believe social media is the best option since it provides applications that can help to practice speaking, reading, listening, and writing, which is the essential and basic way to prevent the diseases, such as dementia, Alzheimer, etc.
>> CORRECT!
( Thank you for still doing your best, Su A. (●\'◡\'●) )
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