Do you think that women should also join the military there in Korea?
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No, I don’t think so. Because we have women’s army corps so women can join it if they want. But I think it should not be necessarily because women have a period for every months so it will be hard to do it. I think it’s enough with them.
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Hi [이름]! Women joining the military has been a big controversy in South Korea. There has been speculations that it promotes gender inequality. I think that they should allow women to join the military but not mandatorily. Only the volunteers shall enter it because some women are not capable of doing things like that. If you have the ability, then you can. But if you don\'t, it\'s fine. :) Thanks for sharing your opinion.
No, I don’t think so. Because we have women’s army corps so women can join it if they want.
>> No, I don\'t think so because there is already a women\'s army corporation for women who want to join the militay.
But I think it should not be necessarily because women have a period for every months so it will be hard to do it.
>> Although I think it should not be necessary because women experience monthly periods so it would be difficult for them to do.
I think it’s enough with them.
>> I think that would be enough.
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