Do you think the education system in your country influences young people’s behavior?

2015-06-25 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

I believe that the education system definitely influences young people’s behavior. Education has a great social importance specially in the modern and complex industrialized societies. The main social objective of education is to complete the socialization process. It means that it is the school’s business to train the whole children even to the extent of teaching them honesty, fair play, consideration for others and a sense of right and wrong. Education must also play a role of preparing students for future occupational positions. The youth should be enabled to play a productive role in society. However, the current education system is too much focused on the technical side such as solving math problems and getting high scores. The society pays compliments to the students who perform well in the tests so that children do not value a sense of citizenship, respecting others, cooperation, and sacrifice for others. Education should be more emphasized on making better human beings.

강사 첨삭

Happy fourth day of the week Sir [이름]!

I hope that you are having a wonderful day,

Yes, I definitely agree with all of your insights written below.

Education is really important.

Like what my parents told me, \"The thing that no one can steal from you is Education\".
Marvelous ideas. Thank you for your time.
Can\'t wait to have a conversation with you in class.

Teacher Nina


I believe that the education system definitely influences young people’s behavior.

>> correct

Education has a great social importance specially in the modern and complex industrialized societies.

>> correct

The main social objective of education is to complete the socialization process.

>> correct 

It means that it is the school’s business to train the whole children even to the extent of teaching them honesty, fair play, consideration for others and a sense of right and wrong.

>> correct

>> OR: It means that it is the school’s business to train the whole being of a child, even to the extent of teaching them honesty, fair play, consideration for others and a sense of right and wrong.

Education must also play a role of preparing students for future occupational positions.

>> correct

The youth should be enabled to play a productive role in society.

>> correct

However, the current education system is too much focused on the technical side such as solving math problems and getting high scores.

>> correct

The society pays compliments to the students who perform well in the tests so that children do not value a sense of citizenship, respecting others, cooperation, and sacrifice for others.

>> Did you mean: The society pays compliments to the students who perform well in the tests, so that children do value a sense of citizenship, respecting others, cooperation, and sacrifice for others.

Education should be more emphasized on making better human beings.

>> correct

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