Do you think the past was better than the present? Why or why not?
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In my opinion, life of people is getting better rapidly. 10 years ago, so many countries and peoples needed to fight with famine. Surely, it is still going on. Even so, people thinks about happiness nowadays totally much more than before Because of people can afford it now.
However, there is a big problem at this moment. The Covid-19 spreaded all around the world and so many people is influenced by Pandemic. I can say present is better than past. But, it might be possible after Covid Pandemic.
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>>In my opinion, the lives of people are getting better rapidly.
>>OR: In my opinion, the quality of human life is getting better rapidly.
10 years ago, so many countries and peoples needed to fight with famine.
>>Ten years ago, so many countries and people needed to fight with famine.
Surely, it is still going on.
>>CORRECT!
Even so, people thinks about happiness nowadays totally much more than before Because of people can afford it now.
>> Even so, people think about and focus on achieving happiness nowadays much more than before because people can afford it now.
However, there is a big problem at this moment.
>>CORRECT!
The Covid-19 spreaded all around the world and so many people is influenced by Pandemic.
>>The Covid-19 had spread all around the world and lots of people are infected.
I can say present is better than past. But, it might be possible after Covid Pandemic.
>>I can say that the present is better than past but it might only be possible after this Covid-19 Pandemic.
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