Do you think there is a link between obesity and other social behaviors? Should there be a “food tax
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Hello [이름] [이름]. Thank you for this. I kind of agree with you on this. I think awareness is more important so consumers will know what they are eating.
- T. Beth
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I think there is a link between obesity and other social behaviors.
>>> correct
when I having some food, I frequently take account for ingredients to prevent being obesity.
>>> When I eat food, I frequently take into account the ingredients to prevent being obese.
but It will be of no use if they indicate inaccurate info on that food.
>>> correct (But it will be of no use if they indicate inaccurate info on that food.)
Thesedays, It is important to indicate ingredients info rather than imposing food tax on that items.
>>> These days, it is more important to indicate the ingredients info rather than imposing food tax on those items.
If the consumer could read that information accurately, the manufactural company will endeavor to satify customer`s requirement.
>>> If the consumer could read the information accurately, the manufacturing company will satify customer`s requirement.
To solve social problem, I always want government to change the root causes.
>>> To solve social problems, I always want the government to change the root causes.
I think these movement will make the society more healthy.
>>> I think these movements will make the society healthier.
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