Do you think there should be more help for beggars, homeless and poor people in your town or city?
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Do you think there should be more help for beggars, homeless and poor people in your town or city?
I think there should be more help for beggars, homeless, and poor people in my town or city. Because they are staying in street. And when people walk down the street the will feel uncomfortable or bad feelings. In South Korea mostly in Seaul there is lots of beggars, homeless annd poor people and they are saying give money to me, and I think they should work and gets money. so that it is fair to everyone. Sometimes on the street there are some peoples who dont have legs or hands. Whenever I saw them I feel bad. I think the goverment should give work for beggars, homeless and poor people. So that they can get money by working and they can buy something that they need. It is good for all of us, because the beggars, homeless and poor people can get money and on the other hand they are helping country by working. Thank you for reading my composition and I hope you think about these people.^^
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I also think about them but I agree with you.
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I think there should be more help for beggars, homeless, and poor people in my town or city.
>>CORRECT
Because they are staying in street.
>>This is because they stay in the streets.
And when people walk down the street the will feel uncomfortable or bad feelings.
>> When people walk down the street, they feel uncomfortable or have bad feelings.
In South Korea mostly in Seaul there is lots of beggars, homeless annd poor people and they are saying give money to me, and I think they should work and gets money.
>>There are a lot of beggars, homeless people, and poor people in South Korea, specifically in Seoul.
>> They usually ask for money from me but I think they should work to get money.
so that it is fair to everyone.
>> It would be fair for everyone.
Sometimes on the street there are some peoples who dont have legs or hands.
>>There are people on the street who do not have any legs or hands.
Whenever I saw them I feel bad.
>>Whenever I see them, I feel bad.
I think the goverment should give work for beggars, homeless and poor people.
>>I think the government should give work to beggars, homeless and poor people.
So that they can get money by working and they can buy something that they need.
>> CORRECT
It is good for all of us, because the beggars, homeless and poor people can get money and on the other hand they are helping country by working.
>>It will benefit all of us since the beggars, homeless, and poor people will get money and they are also helping the country by working.
Thank you for reading my composition and I hope you think about these people.^^
>>CORRECT
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