Do you think there would be less illness in the future?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I think there would be fewer illnesses in the future. Because, these days the medical technology has developed substantially. So, many people with diseases are more likely to be cured.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Sally!
Great answer! I am really hoping that in the future there will be less illnesses. Let\'s talk more about it in the class.
Thank you for answering! ^_^
Kindly check the corrections and suggestions below.
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1. Yes, I think there would be fewer illnesses in the future.
>> Correct!
2. Because, these days the medical technology has developed substantially.
>> Because these days the medical technology has developed substantially.
OR Yes, I think there would be fewer illnesses in the future because these days the medical technology has developed substantially. (NOTE: \"Because\" is a subordinating conjunction, which means that it connects a subordinate clause to an independent clause; good style dictates that there should be NO COMMA between these two clause.)
3. So, many people with diseases are more likely to be cured.
>> Correct!
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