Do you think violence is needed to discipline a child?
학생이 쓴 원문
No, I don’t. I think violence is not allow in anyway. Parents should teach their child so sometimes they need to discipline them. But I think violence is bad for child. It might cause some problem when they growing up. They can also become violent people in the future. So, I think violence is bot needed to discipline a child.
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Hi [이름]! I think the Asian culture is used to using violence when it comes to disciplining their children but this has to end already. Violence is never the key. We should be very patient with children because they are bound to make mistakes as they are growing up. That\'s why I think good communication relationship is very important :) I agree with your answer.
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No, I don’t. I think violence is not allow in anyway.
>>No, I don’t think so. I think violence should not be allowed in anyway.
Parents should teach their child so sometimes they need to discipline them.
>>Parents should teach their children so sometimes they need to discipline them but violence is not the answer.
But I think violence is bad for child.
>>CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.
It might cause some problem when they growing up.
>>It might cause some problems when they grow up.
They can also become violent people in the future.
>> CORRECT
So, I think violence is bot needed to discipline a child.
>> So, I think violence is not needed to discipline a child.
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