Do you think weekends are important for mental health?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think that almost worker think weekends are important for mental health. Because they work on weekdays, they felt weekends are their break time. So they spend weekend with their family and friend for refreshing. They might relieve their work-stress on weekend, and it can be helpful their mental health. However there\'re someone who doesn\'t work only on weekday such as self-employed. Actually, they\'re more busy on weekends. So they spend their time very irregularly, and they also felt that the weekends are meaningless.
강사 첨삭
Hi! I really liked your answer, you expressed your thoughts clearly and made good comparisons between office workers and self-employed people. I agree with you that weekends play a big role in maintaining good mental health and balance in life. Your writing shows great insight into how people’s routines affect their well-being. Keep sharing your opinions like this, they’re practical, thoughtful, and easy to relate to!
-Teacher Wela
I think that almost worker think weekends are important for mental health.
>> I think most workers believe that weekends are important for mental health.
Because they work on weekdays, they felt weekends are their break time.
>>Since they work on weekdays, they feel that weekends are their time to rest.
They spend weekend with their family and friend for refreshing.
>> Many people spend weekends with their family and friends to refresh themselves.
They might relieve their work-stress on weekend, and it can be helpful their mental health.
>> They can relieve work-related stress during the weekend, which helps their mental well-being.
However there\'re someone who doesn\'t work only on weekday such as self-employed.
>> However, there are also people who don’t work only on weekdays, such as the self-employed.
Actually, they\'re more busy on weekends.
>> They are often even busier on weekends.
So they spend their time very irregularly, and they also felt that the weekends are meaningless.
>> As a result, their schedules become irregular, and they may feel that weekends are meaningless.
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