Do you think weekends are important for mental health?
학생이 쓴 원문
Absolutely yes.
We can do things on weekends that we can\'t do on weekdays.
Activities with friends, family and anyone who you love make you happy and it will be helpful to take care of your mental health.
강사 첨삭
You gave a clear and concise answer about the importance of weekends for mental health. I like that you mentioned doing enjoyable activities with friends, family, and loved ones, because it shows you understand the connection between social time and emotional well-being. Your sentences are easy to understand, and your ideas are logical. To improve further, you can focus on making your sentences a little smoother and more formal by using phrases like “loved ones” and “they can help” instead of “anyone who you love” and “it will be helpful.” Overall, this is a strong and thoughtful response, well done!
-Teacher Wela
Activities with friends, family and anyone who you love make you happy and it will be helpful to take care of your mental health.
>> Activities with friends, family, and loved ones make you happy, and they can help take care of your mental health.
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