Do you think what job someone has determined who they are?

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my opinion is sometimes it\'s right, sometime it\'s wrong.

>>In my opinion, sometimes it\'s right but sometimes it could be wrong.
because some people achieve their a dream, but some people not

>>It\'s because some people achieve their dream jobs but some don\'t.

of course, job is very important thing in our life

>>Of course, having a job is very important in our life.
job is one of ways to realize individual dream

>> Acquiring a job is one of ways to realize an individual\'s dream.
 and the best case is what we like to do is become a job

>> At best we would like do get a job that we like.
nevertheless most people pained that their jobs are not the same as the way they try to go.

>>Nevertheless, most people complain that their jobs are not what they really want to have.

but it\'s not a very difficult problem

>> But, it\'s not a very difficult problem.
the reason is it\'s not all of thing in our living

>> The reason is that it\'s not everything that we should live for.
 job is small part of pie

>>Our jobs are just a small part of the big picture.
so we should trying to make a value that we think, and positive for each individual

>>We should try to give value to what we think and we should always be positive about each other.

we can take both or choose one

>> We can take both or choose one.
 we make a decision and make fruit

>>We make our own decisions and reap the fruits.