Do you think women should be treated the same way as men? Why or why not?

2021-04-28 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I think all people should be treated whether they are women or men. but when it comes to job, I think some of standard for women is easier than men. for example, the physical standard of police officer and firefighter is different depends on sex. I think it is unfair. even women, they can\'t avoid physical violence by criminal. this is not discrimination. this is different from sex. I think the standard must be same whether they are women or men.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! That\'s true. Gender inequality is a major controversy nowadays. Everyone should be treated the same. Although, it still might be different based on a person\'s capability regardless what gender they have. 

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I think all people should be treated whether they are women or men. 
>>I think all people should be treated the same way whether they are men or women. 

but when it comes to job, I think some of standard for women is easier than men. 
>>>But when it comes to jobs, I think the standard for women is easier than men. 

for example, the physical standard of police officer and firefighter is different depends on sex. 
>> For example, the physical standard of police officers and firefighters are different based on sex. 

I think it is unfair. even women, they can\'t avoid physical violence by criminal. 
>> I think it\'s unfair. For women, they can\'t avoid physical violence from criminals. 

this is not discrimination. this is different from sex. 
>> This is not discrimination it\'s just understanding the capabilities  of each gender. 

I think the standard must be same whether they are women or men.
>> I think the standard must be the same whether they are women or men.

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