Do you think working multiple jobs is a personal choice or a societal pressure?
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In my perspective, working two- or three- jobs at the same time is more of societal pressure than personal choice. This decision can be based on personal decisions because there might be some people who decide to work multiple jobs to retire earlier and most individuals must overcome their mental and physical constraints to work in various jobs. However, people will find less motivation to work in multiple jobs if they do not face financial constraints. They are experiencing financial crackdowns which have led to the fact that single jobs cannot help them to sustain their living. In most countries, salaries have not increased on par with inflation, and it takes forever for individual to buy a house. According to the research, Korean need to have 15 years of full savings of their salary to buy a house. It will cost extra if they are aiming to get an apartment in Seoul. At the same time, the base salary for new graduates has increased 2-3% compared to pre-pandemic level.
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Thank you for this, Aciel!
In my perspective, working two- or three- jobs at the same time is more of societal pressure than personal choice.
>>> From my perspective, working two or three jobs at the same time is more a result of societal pressure than personal choice.
This decision can be based on personal decisions because there might be some people who decide to work multiple jobs to retire earlier and most individuals must overcome their mental and physical constraints to work in various jobs. >>> This decision can sometimes be based on personal reasons, as there are people who choose to work multiple jobs in order to retire earlier, and many individuals must overcome mental and physical constraints to work in various jobs.
However, people will find less motivation to work in multiple jobs if they do not face financial constraints.
>>> However, people would feel less motivated to work multiple jobs if they did not face financial constraints.
They are experiencing financial crackdowns which have led to the fact that single jobs cannot help them to sustain their living.
>>> Many are experiencing financial pressure, which has led to the reality that a single job is no longer enough to sustain a decent living.
In most countries, salaries have not increased on par with inflation, and it takes forever for individual to buy a house.
>>> correct
>>> OR: In most countries, salaries have not increased at the same rate as inflation, and it takes a very long time for individuals to buy a house.
According to the research, Korean need to have 15 years of full savings of their salary to buy a house.
>>> According to research, Koreans need to save their entire salary for about 15 years to buy a house.
It will cost extra if they are aiming to get an apartment in Seoul.
>>> correct
>>> OR: The cost is even higher if they aim to purchase an apartment in Seoul.
At the same time, the base salary for new graduates has increased 2-3% compared to pre-pandemic level.
>>> correct
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