Do you think you can be a minimalist?
학생이 쓴 원문
I\'m not minimalist. I want to get something. I will get a lot of electric equipment. Later, I will use them when I become a programmer. I am greedy that I want to own many laptops and computers and much electric equipment.
강사 첨삭
Good morning Jay!
Sure thing for a young mind like you have so many ideas! It\'s normal to have this kind off attitude because it is your way of expressing your thoughts.
Thank you for your homework today and I have some few suggestions on how to write your sentence. keep learning :)
T. Aki~
I\'m not minimalist. T. Aki~
>>> CORRECT
I want to get something.
>>> CORRECT
OR >>> There are still some things that I want to get.
I will get a lot of electric equipment.
>>> I plan to get lot of electronic equipment.
Later, I will use them when I become a programmer.
>>> CORRECT
I am greedy that I want to own many laptops and computers and much electric equipment.
>>> I think I am greedy that I want to own many laptops and computers and more electronic equipment.
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