Do you think you can change a major characteristic of your personality if you try?

2018-04-05 · 첨삭 강사 Stacy

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Do you think you can change a major characteristic of your personality if you try? Yes, I think if I try to change my a major characteristic of my personality. Maybe it takes a long time. Actually I am a person who can't satisfied about many things. I am a Christian but I couldn't appreciate to God. Oneday I heard through the broadcasting one idol singer said she write one thankful thing every day before go to bed. From then on I write five thankful things every day before go to bed. At first it was very difficult to me. Anyway I have tried continually and little by little I can change a major characteristic of my personality.

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YOU SAY:


Yes, I think if I try to change my a major characteristic of my personality.
Maybe it takes a long time.

>> Yes, I think I can change the major characteristic of my personality if I will try. But it will definitely be along process.


Actually I am a person who can\'t satisfied about many things.

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Actually, I am a kind of person who cannot be easily satisfied with material things.


I am a Christian but I couldn\'t appreciate to God.

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I am [Name] but I don\'t think I am able to appreciate God.


One day I heard through the broadcasting one idol singer said she write one thankful thing every day before go to bed.

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One day I heard one of the singer that I like, she said she writes one thing that she is thankful for before going to bed.

>> OR: 

From then on I write five thankful things every day before go to bed.

>> OR: 

From that then on, I started writing 5 things that I am thankful for before going to bed.


At first it was very difficult to me.

>> 

At first it was very difficult for me.


Anyway I have tried continually and little by little I can change a major characteristic of my personality.

>> 

Anyway, I am continually trying and slowly I can definitely change the major characteristic of my personality.











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