Do you think you can live without your mobile or is it now an important part of your daily life?
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I want to live without my mobile phone and actually I can live without it unless I work for the company. The only reason why I’m always carrying my cell phone with me is because of my work.I’m required to reply immediately to any inquiries from my boss or colleagues.I also expect my subordinates to respond to my mail as such. For my personal life, I can turn my cell phone off and escape from the hustle and bustle of my busy city life. Unlike the other people, I’m not addicted to the smart phone and I actually try not to touch my phone when I am at home. It is obvious that the smart phone has brought a lot of changes in our life and some people cannot live without their cell phones. Even they put their cell phone beside their heads when they go to bed. They feel anxious when they do not have their cell phones with them. Although it is true that our modern lives rely on such advanced technologies like the smart phone and get lots of benefits, we should avoid beccomming a slave of them
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I appreciate your great interest in answering the questions everyday, Sir [이름].
I had a marvelous time reading your composition.
You are right. There are people who are addicted in using their mobile phone.
I agree with your ideas and let us hope that people won\'t be a slave of modern technology.
Take Care!Teacher Nina
I want to live without my mobile phone and actually I can live without it unless I work for the company. >> Correct
The only reason why I’m always carrying my cell phone with me is because of my work.
>> Correct
>> OR: The only reason why I always have my cellphone is because of my work.
I’m required to reply immediately to any inquiries from my boss or colleagues.
>> Correct
>> OR: I\'m required to send a feedback immediately to all of the inquiries from my boss or colleagues.
I also expect my subordinates to respond to my mail as such.
>> Correct
For my personal life, I can turn my cell phone off and escape from the hustle and bustle of my busy city life.
>> Correct
Unlike the other people, I’m not addicted to the smart phone and I actually try not to touch my phone when I am at home.
>> Unlike the other people, I\'m not addicted to smart phone and I actually try not to touch my phone when I am at home.
It is obvious that the smart phone has brought a lot of changes in our life and some people cannot live without their cell phones.
>> Correct
Even they put their cell phone beside their heads when they go to bed.
>> They even put their cell phone beside their head when they go to bed.>> OR: They even place their mobile phone beside them when they go to bed.
They feel anxious when they do not have their cell phones with them.
>> Correct
Although it is true that our modern lives rely on such advanced technologies like the smart phone and get lots of benefits, we should avoid beccomming a slave of them
>> Correct
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