Do you think you live in a dangerous neighborhood?

2012-02-14 · 첨삭 강사 Marie

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Do you think you live in a dangerous neighborhood? Why or why not? Hello, my name is [이름]. Today I like talk about my topic 'Do you think you live in a dangerous neighborhood? Why or why not?' I think I live in a very safe neighborhood because my neighbors are kind and nice. When they work and get something to eat in the farm they always give some to us. And my neighbors always has a bright happy smile. When I see them I automaticly get a bright smile too. So I think I'm living in a safe neighborhood. Thank you.

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Hello [이름]! Thank you for a very good composition. Your sentences were good. Good job for your hard work. Keep it up. I\'m so glad to hear that you live in a peaceful neighborhood. So, be kind to your neighbors too, okay? ^_^   Do you think you live in a dangerous neighborhood? Why or why not? >> CORRECTHello, my name is [이름]. >> CORRECT Today I like talk about my topic \'Do you think you live in a dangerous neighborhood? Why or why not?\' >> Today, I would like to talk about my topic \'Do you think you live in a dangerous neighborhood? Why or why not?\' I think I live in a very safe neighborhood because my neighbors are kind and nice. >> CORRECT When they work and get something to eat in the farm they always give some to us. >> When they go to work and get something to eat in the farm, they always give some to us. OR >> They always share food from their farms. And my neighbors always has a bright happy smile. >> My neighbors always have bright and happy smiles on their faces. When I see them I automaticly get a bright smile too. >> When I see them I automatically have a bright smile too. So I think I\'m living in a safe neighborhood. >> CORRECT Thank you. >> CORRECT

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