Do you think your neighborhood is safe? What kind of crimes happen in your area?

2018-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 Vance

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Is there a lot of crime in your area? I live in Korea. This country I live in has fewer crimes than any other country. So, I can live comfortably in my country. However, crime is lost in Korea which is so good as this. There are fewer crimes, while there are more terrible crimes than in other countries. For example, there are a variety of horrific crimes, including mutilation murder and child abduction. However, I think Korea has little credibility and crime probability of neighborhood. Still, no matter how reliable your neighbor is, why don't you think twice and open the door? It is important to remember that the wrong choices can lead to disastrous results.

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Is there a lot of crime in your area? I live in Korea. 
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This country I live in has fewer crimes than any other country.
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 So, I can live comfortably in my country. 
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However, crime is lost in Korea which is so good as this. 
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There are fewer crimes, while there are more terrible crimes than in other countries. 
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For example, there are a variety of horrific crimes, including mutilation murder and child abduction. 
>>For example, there are varieties of horrific crimes, including mutilation murder and child abduction. 

However, I think Korea has little credibility and crime probability of neighborhood. 
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Still, no matter how reliable your neighbor is, why don\'t you think twice and open the door?
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 It is important to remember that the wrong choices can lead to disastrous results.
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