Do you use the internet often? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, I use the Internet a lot, and I might be addicted to it. Even when I don’t need to look up information, I’m always online, scrolling through social media. Everything I need and enjoy is online. Also, my job required me to use the Internet, so I can’t imagine my life without it.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Ms. [Name]! You naturally explained your dependence on the Internet, especially when you mentioned scrolling through social media out of habit. A lot of people will probably relate to that. The flow is already clear, and with a few grammar and vocabulary improvements, it sounds much more polished and AL-level.
~T. Jenna
Yes, I use the Internet a lot, and I might be addicted to it.
>>Correct, or: Yes, I use the Internet a lot, and I think I might be addicted to it.
Even when I don’t need to look up information, I’m always online, scrolling through social media.
>>Correct, or: Even when I don’t need to search for anything, I still go online and scroll through social media out of habit.
Everything I need and enjoy is online.
>> Correct, or: Most of the things I enjoy, like watching videos, playing games or reading articles, are online.
Also, my job required me to use the Internet, so I can’t imagine my life without it.
>> Correct, or: Also, my job requires me to use the Internet constantly, so I rely on it almost every day. Because of that, I honestly can’t imagine my life without it anymore.
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Yes, I use the Internet a lot, and I think I might be addicted to it. Even when I don’t need to search for anything, I still go online and scroll through social media out of habit. Most of the things I enjoy, like watching videos, playing games or reading articles, are online. Also, my job requires me to use the Internet constantly, so I rely on it almost every day. Because of that, I honestly can’t imagine my life without it anymore.
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