Do you want to become famous?
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I think I want to become famous but it could be uncomfortable that many people know me so I have a good idea. I could be famous as being a popular YouTuber but if I won’t show people my face they couldn’t notice me so it will make me feel comfortable. And I actually want to be a famous pianist too.
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I think I want to become famous but it could be uncomfortable that many
people know me so I have a good idea. I could be famous as being a
popular YouTuber but if I won’t show people my face they couldn’t
notice me so it will make me feel comfortable. And I actually want to be
a famous pianist too.
>> I think I want to become famous but it could be uncomfortable that many
people know me so I have a good idea. I could be a famous YouTuber but I won’t show people my face so they wouldn’t know it is me and it will make me feel comfortable and free. And I actually want to be
a famous pianist too.
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