Do you want to live forever? If not, how long?
학생이 쓴 원문
Today, it is common to live long because of develop of science.
However, I don\'t want to live forever. I want to live by 80 because I don\'t like to get old.
First, I think that I can be healthy by 80, but if I am getting older than 80, maybe I will be sick. I don\'t want to live in pain.
Second, I will go to travel after I retire my job. I think it is difficult to travel abroad and move anywhere if I\'m over 80. So I will enjoy my life by 80, and I will die. If it is possible, I can die happily. I can say that I live enough.
So, I want to live by then.
강사 첨삭
Hi Se [이름]!
Here are the corrections.
Today, it is common to live long because of develop of science. However, I don\'t want to live forever. I want to live by 80 because I don\'t like to get old.
>>Today, it is common to live long because of development of science. However, I don\'t want to live forever. I want to live by 80 because I don\'t like to get older than that.
First, I think that I can be healthy by 80, but if I am getting older than 80, maybe I will be sick. I don\'t want to live in pain. Second, I will go to travel after I retire my job.
>>First, I think that I can be healthy by 80, but if I am getting older than 80, maybe I will be sick. I don\'t want to live in pain. Second, I will travel after I retire from my job.
I think it is difficult to travel abroad and move anywhere if I\'m over 80. So I will enjoy my life by 80, and I will die. If it is possible, I can die happily. I can say that I live enough. So, I want to live by then.
>>I think it is difficult to travel abroad and move anywhere if I\'m over 80. So, I will enjoy my life by 80, and I will die. If it is possible, I can die happily. I can say that I lived enough. So, I want to live by then.
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