Do you want to live in places that have the same weather all year long or ?
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I prefer to live in places that have only two seasons like spring and fall. As most people do, I do not like the too hot weather, neither the too cold weather. Or if there is a place that has the same moderate climate all year around, it couldn’t be better. The nice weather all year long will be definitely beneficial for people to enjoy their personal lives and to grow economy. When the sun shines with all his might and the sky is clear with a few white clouds, everything is fine. Even flowers, trees and birds will like the sun. The bad weather could cause the delay of construction, costly transportation, and low productivity, so negatively affecting the economy. If I have to choose either the cold or the hot weather, I would rather pick the hot weather because my activities would be restrained by the cold weather and it would cost more than to live in the hot weather.
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I prefer to live in places that have only two seasons like spring and fall.
>> Correct
>> OR: I prefer to live in places where there are only two seasons like spring and fall.
As most people do, I do not like the too hot weather, neither the too cold weather.
>> As for many people, I do not like the weather to be too hot or cold, too.
Or if there is a place that has the same moderate climate all year around, it couldn’t be better.
>> Correct
The nice weather all year long will be definitely beneficial for people to enjoy their personal lives and to grow economy.
>> The nice weather all-year long will definitely be beneficial for people to enjoy their personal lives for the growth of the economy.
When the sun shines with all his might and the sky is clear with a few white clouds, everything is fine.
>> Correct
Even flowers, trees and birds will like the sun.
>> Correct
The bad weather could cause the delay of construction, costly transportation, and low productivity, so negatively affecting the economy.
>> Correct
If I have to choose either the cold or the hot weather, I would rather pick the hot weather because my activities would be restrained by the cold weather and it would cost more than to live in the hot weather.
>> Correct
>> OR: If I have to choose either the cold or the hot weather, I would rather pick the hot/ summer season because my activities would be restrained by the cold/ winter season. And it would cost more than to live in a place with hot weather.
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