Do you wish you could return to moments from your past?

2017-12-07 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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First, if I came back to an elementary school, I would drink a lot of milks and play a rope skipping day by day. Then I might become taller than now. Second, if I came back to a middle school, I would study hard especially Math and English. Accordingly, I might be graduated from a well-known university. Third, if I came back to a high school, I would not make any scar in her mind who was my first-ex-girlfriend. Consequently, we might have got married and carried babies who had appearance similar as us. Fourth, if I came back to before I resigned my previous company, I would ask a CEO to change my department from sales to engineering whether he agreed with me or not. I want to change this kind of moment and I already know it’s impossible to return. That’s why I like to watch movies that have stories regarding the time travelling.

강사 첨삭

Good morning, Jason^^

Going to yesterday is a very interesting thing, isn\'t it?

It is filled with \"what if\'s\" and \"should\'ve\".

However, I believe that our choices have rational reasons^^

See you later!

First, if I came back to an elementary school, I would drink a lot of milks and play a rope skipping day by day.

>>First, if I came back to elementary school, I would drink a lot of milk and play skipping rope day by day.

 Then I might become taller than now.

>>CORRECT!
 Second, if I came back to a middle school, I would study hard especially Math and English.

>> Second, if I came back to middle school, I would study hard, especially Math and English.

 Accordingly, I might be graduated from a well-known university.

>> Accordingly, I might have graduated from a well-known university.

Third, if I came back to a high school, I would not make any scar in her mind who was my first-ex-girlfriend.

>>Third, if I came back to high school, I would not make any scar in the mind of my first-ex-girlfriend.

Consequently, we might have got married and carried babies who had appearance similar as us.

>>Consequently, we might have gotten married and carried babies who had an appearance similar to ours.
Fourth, if I came back to before I resigned my previous company, I would ask a CEO to change my department from sales to engineering whether he agreed with me or not.

>>Fourth, if I came back to the moment before I resigned from my previous company, I would ask the CEO to change my department from sales to engineering whether he agreed with me or not.
 I want to change this kind of moment and I already know it’s impossible to return.

>>CORRECT!

 That’s why I like to watch movies that have stories regarding the time travelling.

>> That’s why I like to watch movies that have stories regarding time traveling.

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