Do you worry about your health when you eat salty, sugary, and fatty food?
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No, not at all. I don\'t think of the calories what I eat because I don\'t still have any health problems until now. The only thing I consider is my belly. I was a guy who had slim body before my 30s. I don\'t remember when I have my belly. It\'s ok to have big belly but I sometimes feel uncomfortable due to it especially, I feel annoyed if I sit down on a chair. Koreans used to eat it\'s traditional food but it has changed a lot. Many people love eating western food. These changes cause some health problem like diabites, obesity and diseases related with stomach. Natually, people are interested in the nutrients what they have. We know less salty and sugar food help maintain healthy body, but it is not usually delicious. Although, it is important to know what to eat, I would have more delicious food instead of healthy food.
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No, not at all.
>> CORRECT!
I don\'t think of the calories what I eat because I don\'t still have any health problems until now.
>> I don\'t think about the calories of what I eat because I still don\'t have any health problems until now.
The only thing I consider is my belly.
>> CORRECT!
I was a guy who had slim body before my 30s.
>> CORRECT!
I don\'t remember when I have my belly.
>> I don\'t remember when I had my beer belly.
It\'s ok to have big belly but I sometimes feel uncomfortable due to it especially, I feel annoyed if I sit down on a chair.
>> CORRECT!
Koreans used to eat it\'s traditional food but it has changed a lot.
>> Koreans used to eat the traditional food but it has changed a lot.
Many people love eating western food.
>> CORRECT!
These changes cause some health problem like diabites, obesity and diseases related with stomach.
>> These changes cause some health problem like diabetes, obesity, and diseases related with the stomach.
Natually, people are interested in the nutrients what they have.
>> Natually, people are interested in the nutrients of what these food have.
We know less salty and sugar food help maintain healthy body, but it is not usually delicious.
>> CORRECT!
Although, it is important to know what to eat, I would have more delicious food instead of healthy food.
>> CORRECT!
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