Do young men also have body image problems?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, they do. When I was thirty, one of my cousin gave me advice about how I look better. They are thinking, nice appearance is powerful advantage. When I watch a TV. I can see beautiful boys easily. for example BTS. Many young people want to look like them. Young men who put on makeup are increasing, and they want to wear well known brand cloths. Other people want to have good body line through weight training. But, there is a problem. While doing weight training, Some young people drink protein supplements. If they drink protein supplements, it is possible to lost reproductive capacity.
강사 첨삭
Good evening [이름]ny! :)
Thank you for answering our essay question.
I agree that regardless of gender, everyone can body image problems.
This is generally because of the unrealistic standards that our society is setting especially for young people.
I hope that your kids won\'t have to go through that kind of crisis in the future.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re having a great evening.
Thank you for answering our essay question.
I agree that regardless of gender, everyone can body image problems.
This is generally because of the unrealistic standards that our society is setting especially for young people.
I hope that your kids won\'t have to go through that kind of crisis in the future.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re having a great evening.
See you in class later. ^^
~T. Charry
~T. Charry
>> CORRECT!
When I was thirty, one of my cousin gave me advice about how I look better.
>> When I was thirty, one of my cousins gave me advice about how I would look better.
They are thinking, nice appearance is powerful advantage.
>> They are thinking that nice appearance is a powerful advantage.
When I watch a TV. I can see beautiful boys easily.
>> When I watch TV, I often see beautiful boys.
for example BTS.
>> An example of that is BTS.
Many young people want to look like them.
>> CORRECT!
Young men who put on makeup are increasing, and they want to wear well known brand cloths.
>> Young men who put on makeup are increasing and they want to wear branded or designer clothes.
Other people want to have good body line through weight training.
>> Other people want to have a good body line through weight training.
But, there is a problem.
>> CORRECT!
While doing weight training, Some young people drink protein supplements.
>> While doing weight training, some young people drink protein supplements.
If they drink protein supplements, it is possible to lost reproductive capacity.
>> If they drink protein supplements, it could affect their reproductive health.
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