Doctor
학생이 쓴 원문
My dream is doctor because I\'m happy when sick people get my treatment and get well.
I think happyness, recovery, hard, mathematics, language, study and university.
My grandmother said that doctors should study mathmatics and languages hard.
I want to go College of Medicine to become a doctor.
I will work hard for patients to become happy.
P.S. Sorry for late homework!
강사 첨삭
Good evening, [이름]! (^_^)
Thank you so much for accomplishing your homework.
If I am not mistaken, I asked what comes to mind whenever you hear the word \'doctor\'.
However, you talked about your dream of becoming a doctor.
I really appreciate your composition. I have made some modifications for you to review later on.
__Teacher Mayleen :)
My dream is doctor because I\'m happy when sick people get my treatment and get well.
>>> My dream is to become a doctor because treating/curing sick people will make me happy.
P.S. Sorry for late homework!
I think happyness, recovery, hard, mathematics, language, study and university.
>>> I think happiness is recovering from something hard, studying mathematics and language, and going to college.
My grandmother said that doctors should study mathmatics and languages hard.
>>> My grandmother said that doctors should study mathematics and language very hard.
I want to go College of Medicine to become a doctor.
>>> I want to enter the College of Medicine to become a doctor.
I will work hard for patients to become happy.
>>> I will work hard for my patients to happy.
P.S. Sorry for late homework!
>>> Sorry for sending my homework late.
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