Does age make me more aware of and care for others?
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I think that age makes me more thoughtful because the older I get, the more I experience.
>> I think that age makes me more thoughtful because the older I get, the more I experience things.
When I was very young, I was only able to be aware of myself, because I hadn\'t thought of other people.
>> When I was very young, I was only aware of myself because I didn\'t thought of other people.
>> When I was very young, I hadn\'t thought of other people because I was only aware of myself.
But, getting older, I have meet many kinds of people.
>> I have also met many kinds of people as I get older.
So, I started thinking about other people\'s situation and feeling.
>> So, I started thinking about other people\'s situation and feelings.
That makes me walk in other person\'s shoes and take care of others.
>> CORRECT
Besides we always look what people do to others and think which behavior is better, so we learn unconsciously how to care others.
>> Besides, we always look what people do to others and think which behavior is better, so we learn unconsciously how to care others.
Thus I am trying to be aware of and care for other people in that way.
>> Thus, I am trying to be aware of and care for other people in that way.
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