Does beauty affect one\'s success in life?
학생이 쓴 원문
Beauty affects directly to success, I wish that’s not true. Actually, beauty for women is to be a weapon to get a job. Inner-side is more important than appearance, but it doesn’t affect to get a real job. It’s sad but it’s true. quite a lot to success especially to women.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! Thank you for doing another of your homework. I also feel the same way as you do. Even if we don\'t want it to be that way but there will always be times that we can experience it.
~Teacher Sheila
Beauty affects directly to success, I wish that’s not true.
>>Beauty directly affects success, I wish that\'s not true.
OR>>Beauty directly affects the success of a person and I wish that\'s not true.
Actually, beauty for women is to be a weapon to get a job.
>>Actually, beauty of women is a weapon to get a job.
OR>>Actually, beauty of women is a great weapon in getting a job.
Inner-side is more important than appearance, but it doesn’t affect to get a real job.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Inner beauty is more important than outer beauty but it doesn\'t affect in getting jobs.
It’s sad but it’s true.
>>CORRECT
quite a lot to success especially to women.
>>It\'s quite a lot, especially to women.
OR>>There is quite a lot of success, especially to women.
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