Does it bother you that people gamble on sporting events?

2014-05-16 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I’m not against making a bet on sports games. Actually we can more enjoy a game by making a bet. When you play sports games, making a bet can help you concentrate on the game. There are no other stronger stimulators to make games exciting than making a bet. When we bet money, lunch, or ice cream on playing pool, soccer, or tennis, you will be surprised by looking at yourself how the level of your focus gets intensified. There were many incidents of killing friends even among friends while playing golf due to the bet. Gambling could be different from making a bet. The side effect of gambling is enormous. You can be easily addicted to gambling. Once you are addicted, you can lose everything you have such as money, house, your social status, and even your family. It will destroy your whole life. You might start gambling with small amount of money at first for fun, but when you do it repeatedly, you wouldn’t be able to quit gambling. So, do not even try from the begining.

강사 첨삭

Good evening Sir [이름]!
thank you so much for your time.^^

What a perfect composition! I am so proud of you!
Gambling really destroys relationships.

I totally agree with your opinions below.

I think this topic would be great in our class too.
Take a lot of rest this weekend. See you!

Teacher Nina

 

I’m not against making a bet on sports games.

>> Correct!

Actually we can more enjoy a game by making a bet.

>> Correct!

When you play sports games, making a bet can help you concentrate on the game.

>> Correct!

>> OR: When you play sports games, you can concentrate on the game more by making a bet.

There are no other stronger stimulators to make games exciting than making a bet.

>> There is no other stronger stimulator to make games exciting than making a bet.

When we bet money, lunch, or ice cream on playing pool, soccer, or tennis, you will be surprised by looking at yourself how the level of your focus gets intensified.

>> Correct!

There were many incidents of killing friends even among friends while playing golf due to the bet.

>> Correct!

Gambling could be different from making a bet.

>> Correct!

The side effect of gambling is enormous.

>> Correct!

You can be easily addicted to gambling.

>> Correct!

Once you are addicted, you can lose everything you have such as money, house, your social status, and even your family.

>> Correct!

It will destroy your whole life.

>> Correct!

You might start gambling with small amount of money at first for fun, but when you do it repeatedly, you wouldn’t be able to quit gambling.

>> Correct!

So, do not even try from the begining.

>> Correct!

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