Does moving to a new place make people more independent or more stressed?
학생이 쓴 원문
moving to a new place is very big change for anyone.
during preparing for the move, people imagine a better life than the one they live now.
that thought becomes the time to care for myself
through that process, people can understand who they are and become more independent.
강사 첨삭
Thanks for your answer, Soo Bin! You expressed your ideas clearly, and I can see your reasoning very well. Moving to a new place really can push people to reflect and grow. I appreciate the effort you put into explaining your thoughts. Keep going, you’re improving step by step!
-Teacher Wela
moving to a new place is very big change for anyone.
>> Moving to a new place is a very big change for anyone.
during preparing for the move, people imagine a better life than the one they live now.
>> During the preparation for the move, people often imagine a better life than the one they have now.
that thought becomes the time to care for myself
>> That thought becomes a moment to reflect on themselves and take better care of their own needs.
through that process, people can understand who they are and become more independent.
>> Through that process, people can understand who they are and become more independent.
>> Through that process, people can understand who they are and become more independent.
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