Does stress affect your ability to make good decisions?

2017-12-13 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Some examples as below. First, I am studying English because of the stress. While I worked in Malaysia, I got hard time especially in the meeting with foreigners since I couldn’t understand clearly. Thus, I decided to study hard and it has been improved but, sadly, not yet enough to communicate fluently with them. However, at least, I can complain well now when I feel unfair. Second, I have achieved licenses since I had got a stress about finances. Furthermore, I wanted to prove my abilities to my ex-girlfriend for revenge that I could live without her well. Anyhow, it has given me plenty of opportunities to submit resumes and have interviews although she didn’t interested what I did and had. Third, when I feel nervous owing to the stress of an interview, I prepare for a practicing it. And it would help me if interviewers asked me the questions what I expected. Anyway, if I don't have any stress, I might feel boring for a living. Hence, stress influences me an improvement.

강사 첨삭

I definitely think that a sufficient amount of stress can help us boost our abilities~

However, we have to remember that its excessive amount can also destroy us.

Have a great day, Jason! See you later!

Some examples as below.
>>Some examples are stated below.
First, I am studying English because of the stress.

>>First, I am studying English because of stress.
While I worked in Malaysia, I got hard time especially in the meeting with foreigners since I couldn’t understand clearly.

>>While I worked in Malaysia, I got a hard time especially meeting foreigners since I couldn’t understand  them clearly.

 Thus, I decided to study hard and it has been improved but, sadly, not yet enough to communicate fluently with them.

>> Thus, I decided to study hard and it has been improved but, sadly, not yet enough to communicate fluently with them.

However, at least, I can complain well now when I feel unfair.
>>
CORRECT!
Second, I have achieved licenses since I had got a stress about finances.

>>Second, I have achieved licenses since I had got stress about finances.

 Furthermore, I wanted to prove my abilities to my ex-girlfriend for revenge that I could live without her well.

>> Furthermore, I wanted to prove my abilities to my ex-girlfriend as revenge that I could live without her well.

 Anyhow, it has given me plenty of opportunities to submit resumes and have interviews although she didn’t interested what I did and had.
>>
Anyhow, it has given me plenty of opportunities to submit resumes and have interviews although she wasn’t interested in what I did and had.
Third, when I feel nervous owing to the stress of an interview, I prepare for a practicing it.

>>Third, when I feel nervous owing to the stress of an interview, I practice to prepare for it.

And it would help me if interviewers asked me the questions what I expected.
>>
And it would help me if interviewers asked me the questions that I expected.
Anyway, if I don\'t have any stress, I might feel boring for a living.

>>Anyway, if I don\'t have any stress, I might feel bored for a living.
 Hence, stress influences me an improvement.

>>  Hence, stress influences me to make an improvement.

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