Does your city have any festivals or parades during the summer?
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Hello Sophie! I enjoyed reading your essay. Thank you for telling me about the festival you celebrate during the spring time. Your work is very informative. Keep up the good work!~~T.Dee
Actually, We don\'t have festivals during the summer.
>>Actually, we don\'t have festivals during the summer.
We have a festival in the spring instead.
>>CORRECT!>>
The festival is called Gaya Festival.
>>CORRECT!
>>OR: It is called Gaya Festival.
Gaya is the old name of Gimhae.
>>CORRECT!
>>OR: Gaya was the previous name of Gimhae.
When you go there, there are a lot of street with a series of food.
>>When you attend the festival, you may expect several food items sold on the streets.
And also, vistors can have cultural expriences in that place.
>>Also, vistors can have cultural expriences in that place.
And we have the dance competitons.
>>To add to this, we have the dance competitions.
Likeswise, there are many itneresting things.
>>Likewise, there are many other interesting things to do and to discover during the festival.
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