Does your country have a holiday when it is traditional to help out people in your community?

2015-05-18 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I don’t think that we have a holiday when it is traditional to help our people in our community. In Korea, we have national holidays that do not exist in other countries such as Children’s Day, Buddha’s Birthday, Constitution Day, and Hangul Day. Establishing a national holiday is not an easy process. First of all, it should have a national consensus. It means that a majority of people should agree and, as an official process, more than half of national assembly members should vote in favor of it. In the process of making up a national holiday, we often face strong opposition from business communities because the more public holidays increase, the higher labor cost will incur, which could be a more financial burden to business owners. It couldn’t be better if we could have a holiday to help our people in our community. However, there are too many other meaningful days and we cannot designate all those days as national holidays. We should take into account various factors.

강사 첨삭

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Teacher Nina


I don’t think that we have a holiday when it is traditional to help our people in our community.

>> correct

In Korea, we have national holidays that do not exist in other countries such as Children’s Day, Buddha’s Birthday, Constitution Day, and Hangul Day.

>> correct

Establishing a national holiday is not an easy process.

>> correct

>> OR: Establishing a National Holiday is not an easy process.

First of all, it should have a national consensus.

>> correct

It means that a majority of people should agree and, as an official process, more than half of national assembly members should vote in favor of it.

>> correct

In the process of making up a national holiday, we often face strong opposition from business communities because the more public holidays increase, the higher labor cost will incur, which could be a more financial burden to business owners.

>> correct

It couldn’t be better if we could have a holiday to help our people in our community.

>> correct

However, there are too many other meaningful days and we cannot designate all those days as national holidays.

>> correct

We should take into account various factors.

>> correct

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