Does your hobby interfere with your work/study/personal life? Why or why not?
학생이 쓴 원문
My hobby is listening to music. And whenever I study English, listening to music is so useful to my studying. But if its music sounds is loud too much, I can\'t attention studying. So staying proper sounds is so important. In short, my hobby gives me good influence.
강사 첨삭
Hello Cindy!
Thank you for sharing your hobby today. I agree that music helps you study. Choose the right sounds while studying. :)
~T. Maine
>>Correct.
And whenever I study English, listening to music is so useful to my studying.
>>And whenever I study English, listening to music is so useful for my studies.
But if its music sounds is loud too much, I can\'t attention studying.
>>But if the music\'s sound is too loud, I can\'t pay attention to my studies.
So staying proper sounds is so important.
>>So using proper sounds and adjusting the right volume is so important.
In short, my hobby gives me good influence.
>>In short, my hobby gives me a good influence.
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