Donating money to poor people

2021-09-07 · 첨삭 강사 Debbie

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There are two situations; first situation is people who don\'t have enough money donate to poor people, and people who have enough money donate to poor people. I think first is wrong and second is great. Then I\'ll cite reason why first situation is wrong. Though donation is very good behavior, but if I have not enough money then i can\'t donate. because I may more poor people so someone should donate for me. So the donation that I did is useless. In conclusion, we have to donate for poor people with enough money.

강사 첨삭

There are two situations; first situation is people who don\'t have enough money donate to poor people, and people who have enough money donate to poor people.
>> There are two kinds of people - people who don\'t have have enough money to donate to poor people and people who have enough money to donate to poor people.

 I think first is wrong and second is great. 
>> I think the former is bad, and the latter is good.

Then I\'ll cite reason why first situation is wrong.
>> I\'ll cite reasons why the former is bad.

Though donation is very good behavior, but if I have not enough money then i can\'t donate. 
>> Though donation is a very good behavior, I can\'t donate if I don\'t have enough money.

because I may more poor people so someone should donate for me. 
>> In addition, I maybe poorer so someone should donate to me.

So the donation that I did is useless. 
>> I\'m sorry. What do you mean?

In conclusion, we have to donate for poor people with enough money.
>> In conclusion, we have to donate money to poor people.

Thank you for trying your best to answer tonight\'s homework, Daniel. 

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