donation
학생이 쓴 원문
This is a case of wrong donation.
Of course, it shows the low citizenship of China.
Donations should not be ostentation or competition.
Besides they should not be jealous and distort about donor.
They need to reorganaize donation system totally.
When someone wants to donate to school, they do not for my children\'s class but for the whole school welfare.
강사 첨삭
Hello there, Ms. [이름]!
There is nothing wrong on donation but it should be done in a proper way. No matter how good one\'s intention it, but we have to consider giving or donating for the welfare of the whole school.
Thank you for this!
Aki~
This is a case of wrong donation.
>>> This kind of donation is wrong.
Of course, it shows the low citizenship of China.
>>> Of course, it shows the low status of citizens in China.
Donations should not be ostentation or competition.
>>> CORRECT!
Besides they should not be jealous and distort about donor.
>>> However, they should not be jealous and criticize the donor.
They need to reorganaize donation system totally.
>>> They need to reorganize the donation system properly.
When someone wants to donate to school, they do not for my children\'s class but for the whole school welfare.
>> When someone wants to donate to the school, they do not do it for the children\'s class but for the welfare of the whole school.
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