Dream
학생이 쓴 원문
I have done homework about my dream. So this time I decided to write about "dream" when I sleep. I had a dream fifth a week. Almost I had a night mare, and it is vivid in my mind until now. Mainly I was pursued something. After sleeping, I felt always afraid and tired. I don't know why I had a night mare. Studies of sleeping, frequently vivid night mare is sign of Alzheimer's. Other researchers insist that to remember dream is good for improvement of memory. I confused which I should believe. Once in a while, I had a good dream. I was Harry Potter in this dream and I flied sky with broom. However I wasn't happy forever. It was rainstorm and suddenly I forgot how to use magic. I became embarrassing and scared and then I woke up. I want to sleep without any dreams whether it is good or not.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
I also dream sometimes, like I am flying and the enemy is chasing me.
At that point, I always try to wake up to finish it. After that, I pray before going back to bed.
Here are the corrections.
Stay safe,
-- Connie --
I have done homework about my dream.
>> I already did homework about my dream.
So this time I decided to write about "dream" when I sleep.
>> correct
I had a dream fifth a week.
>> I dream five times a week.
Almost I had a night mare, and it is vivid in my mind until now.
>> I almost had a night mare and it’s still vivid in my mind now.
Mainly I was pursued something.
>> I pursued something.
After sleeping, I felt always afraid and tired.
>> After sleeping, I always feel afraid and tired.
I don't know why I had a night mare.
>> Correct
Studies of sleeping, frequently vivid night mare is sign of Alzheimer's.
>> Some studies say that frequent vivid night mares is a sign for Alzheimer’s disease.
Other researchers insist that to remember dream is good for improvement of memory.
>> Other researchers insist that to remember a dream is good for the improvement of our memory.
I confused which I should believe.
>> I’m confused on what to believe.
Once in a while, I had a good dream.
>> Once in a while, I have a good dream.
I was Harry Potter in this dream and I flied sky with broom.
>> I was Harry Potter in this dream and I flew in the sky with a broom.
However I wasn't happy forever.
>> However, it didn’t give me a lasting happiness.
It was rainstorm and suddenly I forgot how to use magic.
>> It was rainstorm and suddenly I forgot how to use the magic.
I became embarrassing and scared and then I woke up.
>> I was so embarrassed and scared and then I woke up.
I want to sleep without any dreams whether it is good or not.
>> Correct
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