dropouts

2022-11-07 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

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I know that nowdays the number og dropouts is increasing in high school. It is a natural phenomenon in the reality of Korean education. If thry are problem conscious and challenging they never be satistied about Korean education.

강사 첨삭

Hello Ms. [이름]!
I appreciate your effort in sharing your thought in the form of writing. 
Then, I would like to know your feeling about the phenomenon that these kids dropping out of school. Does it have a positive effect?
See you later.
Aki~

I know that nowdays the number og dropouts is increasing in high school.
>>> I know that nowadays the number of dropouts is increasing in high school.

It is a natural phenomenon in the reality of Korean education.
>>> CORRECT!

If thry are problem conscious and challenging they never be satistied about Korean education.
>>> If they are problem-conscious and is challenging for them, they will never be satisfied with Korean education.

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