E-bay
학생이 쓴 원문
These days, I found something interesting.
It is E-bay which is the most famous shopping site in the world.
and I also found the items in E bay are cheaper than ones in korea.
So I found some way to make a pocket money.
I decided to buy some watches in E bay and resell them in Korea
at higher price.
So I bought about 12 watches in E bay.
and they arrived today.
I want to have a thriving business.
강사 첨삭
My dear [이름],
You are such a very smart guy, having that kind of idea will give you a very lucrative job,kkk...
Anyway, job well done on your composition my dear, keep up the good work..
T.Cam
These days, I found something interesting.
>>correctIt is E-bay which is the most famous shopping site in the world.and I also found the items in E bay are cheaper than ones in korea.>>correctSo I found some way to make a pocket money.
>>So I found some ways on how to earn my pocket money.I decided to buy some watches in E bay and resell them in Koreaat higher price.
>>correctSo I bought about 12 watches in E bay.and they arrived today.>>correctI want to have a thriving business.
>>correct
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